Friday, August 13, 2010

55-Reruns


Tick Tock
My present is passing
As I stand here alone
Watching from a distance
Reruns of the past
Tears
Break my shields
And you slip through the holes
Making me sink in you
Drowning my soul
The scars are fading
Only me and you remain
The pains are  aching
Only me and you remain.

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19 comments:

Brian Miller said...

nice to see you on the 55s this e week maha...

the scars are fading, but the pain is still there...between them...hmm...nice 55.

THE BEATY said...

so many great lines here its hard to do a quote comment...

margg. said...

55's are an excellent idea.

this is wonderful.

Jannie Funster said...

Yes, many great lines here.

I like the idea of the holes, holes in shields -- armor in love never seems the right outfit.

Nicely done!

G-Man said...

Maha...
Outstanding My Friend
This was intensly passionate.
Excellent 55...
Thanks for returning to the Funfest, and have a Kick Ass Week-End.

Susan Deborah said...

55, you too. Challenges in words are definitely seductive and inviting for a keen writer.

The past and the present always alternate in our life making it distant :)

Joy always,
Susan

Claudia said...

very passionate writing Maha - and always good when the scars are fading...

Austin said...

This was really good. I like the idea of melting through the holes into, that was really nice!

Mine is up here

John's comments said...

not looking good for her is it. To hear or read my non-PC illustrated Friday 55 click here. Warning you may have to read the footnote after to make sense of it!

Magpie said...

What huge amounts of emotion you pull out of me in just 55 words.
Beautiful, Maha.

Sam Liu said...

Dark and haunting, Maha. This piece has a poignant beauty and sensual mystery.

dulce said...

such love, stuck in the past... how sweetly yo express such a feeling... that loneliness, co dependence,, staring from the passing present...

in_blue_sky said...

itna blogs kyon hai?
But ur poems amazing.
Thank u

Lu Ann said...

I like your 55 posts! sorry not much to say today Ive been kinda distracted but i TRULY LIKE IT:)

Oddyoddyo13 said...

I love the title-"Reruns".

I can relate. :)

KB said...

Those reruns can really do your head in.

Mine’s here.

moondustwriter said...

nice 55 - what remains in the end...

thanks for your kind comments on One Shot this week

smiles from the moon

Mama Zen said...

Oh, don't watch from a distance!

Beautiful writing.

moondustwriter said...

This one pulls at my heart. I want to know more and see the end result be a success.

Nice 55

smiles from the Moon