Pain underlaid our faces digging its creases deep into our soul; a broken window offering a decaying view of our hearts. But to them we were still great. Instead of seeing what lay before them, their eyes were shapeable, malleable to whatever truth the minds wanted to perceive. They couldn’t get to us. There was always glass standing between our world and theirs. And between the glasses there were lies. And within the lies there were convoluted facts. And inside the facts there was nothingness. And with nothingness we were suffused.
We were perpetually lonely. Our souls took that form. But that never hurt. All we wished for was to be alone, away from the million nostrils sucking our air and leaving us suffocating. Away from the sun that burnt our skin. Away from the words rendered unheard. Away from the tongues that murdered truth. Away from the swords slicing our hearts to pieces. Away from everything and everyone. If it was what it took, demolish the shining crystal. Disperse its pieces among the corners of Earth so they wouldn’t put them back together. Let them see the small tarnished hearts barely beating. Let them see who we always were. But even then they wouldn’t shun us. They would completely destroy whatever remained.
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26 comments:
you write beautifully.
always.
this was INCREDIBLE. truly, one of your best posts yet.
incredible extremely beautiful
Beautiful!
Oh my was that a powerfully written piece of poetry. Heart and gut wrenching. The descriptives,and bought a flood of imagery of eons of human suffering through the ages.
Joanny
Simply put ... WOW!
This is amazing...so beautifully written ~ I loved it!
you make the words trip off the tongue...for me the line about refugees sets the tone of this whole piece...i like that...
Dear Maha: This is a very deep philosophical poem. The creatures magnified (I love how you describe this). How could we ever know how these creatures in "the fishbowl" really feel about things. We are worlds apart. I love how you made this story from the creatures POV (point of view). How much we miss since we aren't walking in the creature's shoes. Excellent!
You always suffuse so many ideas into your writing, this is no exception. The words, "a broken window offering a decaying view of our hearts" was extremely poignant for me, a very powerful description. This is very beautifully written, Maha.
"And within the lies there were convuluted facts. And inside the facts there was nothingness." very beautiful Maha. Another amazing display of word play.
There was always glass standing between our world and theirs.
Powerful line.
That was so amazing. I loved the feeling of emptiness, yet the invincibility of this.
every single time i read your work i am asking myself, where? where are you that you speak such profound wisdom? how is it that your well is so deep that the bottom has not been found? you are nothing short of amazing and i love your work!
WOW girl this is such a beautiful and thought provoking depiction of insatisfaction...
brilliant as always
Such a deepness of thoughts in your writing, amazing!
Christine
stopped by again for another taste...and my mind wanders once again. smiles.
My. My. My. What terrific writing, Maha! It leaves me speechless.
oh yes Maha I would like to thank you for suporting my blog in its first hundred posts and for introducing me to your awsome writing style. (something I've attempted but failed at)
Maha, your writing endlessly captivates me. I'm left wondering how something so profound can come from one so young.
You're a gifted writer. As I said before I really hope you write a book someday. I'd line up in the rain to buy a copy.
What amazing descriptions and so powerful I loved these lines...
'. Away from the words rendered unheard. Away from the tongues that murdered truth.'
Christine
Lovely writing. such passion.
You can write!
Surreal and beautiful. Thank you for posting.
Trying to break and hide the pieces of crystal for protection portents such fear of betrayal. Lovely piece.
you write about common struggles and universal feelings ...which is very moving and unique!
very powerful and unique magpie!
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