Thursday, May 6, 2010

55-Unify

Your oneness is gone as you thrust your heart between my ribs and let it beat the same. Solidity is forsaken. We melt into each other then slither down the cliffs of solitude.  The violins of night sing their melody. My body loses half of its soul and wanders again in its desolate self. Alone.

22 comments:

Magpie said...

I love the line, "The violins of night sing their melody." But are you united or parted?

sheri... said...

haunting, yearning...i can almost hear the screams coming from a mouth that can't open. this was fascinating, maha, a great 55!
thank you so much for taking the time to visit my granddaughters site...you have the insights to share what i cannot!

JenniAsh said...

What a bizarre but effective desciption!
Nice.

Sam Liu said...

Magically sensual, the description is wonderful. Your 55s are always marvelous!

Brian Miller said...

dang...thrust your heart between my ribs...yet still alone in the end...this is beautiful sorrow.

Oddyoddyo13 said...

I loved the ending-so beautiful.

SandyCarlson said...

Such intimacy, such solitude. Such love. Well done.

Mama Zen said...

Gorgeous!

Peter Stone said...

Those moments when two become one, yet only to shatter into broken two halves when their paths go separate ways. Alone indeed.

Touching 55 as always, Maha.

My 55 is We Stand There

Leslie said...

I'm not sure if I should be glad or sad - the end result is - Alone!!!

Nice 55

mine is at
http://wp.me/pDORjBa

järnebrand said...

Well done. Again... Powerful and strong and sad. I could feel it.
Great 55! /Jo.

margg. said...

bizarre.
but beautiful.
really beautiful.
x

Hootin' Anni said...

You must....no, really...I'm serious. You MUST seriously consider writing as a career!!!

Mine is "LOST IN THE TRANSLATION"

Have a great weekend! [and as always, scroll down a bit to find my 55]

Chef Kar said...

A beautiful melody in 55 words. I love your first line ~ so originally spoken. Fabulous job.

I'm up (with a few extra words):

Friday Flash 55 ~ Butterfly Kisses

Felicitas said...

The risks we all take in the pursuit of love. Brilliantly told, Maha!

ForLoveAndEvil said...

Brilliant as always, Every word spoke to me, Great Piece

Andy Sewina said...

Haunting, but very nicely written!!

Monkey Man said...

A very telling 55. Right from the soul.

Tracy said...

This started out happy then sad for me. Beautiful phrasing and descriptive words.

Oddyoddyo13 said...

I gave you an award!!

Dianne said...

less painful, more accessible, and with a sense of resolution on the horizon.

keep writing,
mine is up HERE

Sh@KiR@ CK said...

WOW..you are very talented.
great 55!
Mine is here
Have a great weekend!

hugs
shakira