Your oneness is gone as you thrust your heart between my ribs and let it beat the same. Solidity is forsaken. We melt into each other then slither down the cliffs of solitude. The violins of night sing their melody. My body loses half of its soul and wanders again in its desolate self. Alone.
22 comments:
I love the line, "The violins of night sing their melody." But are you united or parted?
haunting, yearning...i can almost hear the screams coming from a mouth that can't open. this was fascinating, maha, a great 55!
thank you so much for taking the time to visit my granddaughters site...you have the insights to share what i cannot!
What a bizarre but effective desciption!
Nice.
Magically sensual, the description is wonderful. Your 55s are always marvelous!
dang...thrust your heart between my ribs...yet still alone in the end...this is beautiful sorrow.
I loved the ending-so beautiful.
Such intimacy, such solitude. Such love. Well done.
Gorgeous!
Those moments when two become one, yet only to shatter into broken two halves when their paths go separate ways. Alone indeed.
Touching 55 as always, Maha.
My 55 is We Stand There
I'm not sure if I should be glad or sad - the end result is - Alone!!!
Nice 55
mine is at
http://wp.me/pDORjBa
Well done. Again... Powerful and strong and sad. I could feel it.
Great 55! /Jo.
bizarre.
but beautiful.
really beautiful.
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You must....no, really...I'm serious. You MUST seriously consider writing as a career!!!
Mine is "LOST IN THE TRANSLATION"
Have a great weekend! [and as always, scroll down a bit to find my 55]
A beautiful melody in 55 words. I love your first line ~ so originally spoken. Fabulous job.
I'm up (with a few extra words):
Friday Flash 55 ~ Butterfly Kisses
The risks we all take in the pursuit of love. Brilliantly told, Maha!
Brilliant as always, Every word spoke to me, Great Piece
Haunting, but very nicely written!!
A very telling 55. Right from the soul.
This started out happy then sad for me. Beautiful phrasing and descriptive words.
I gave you an award!!
less painful, more accessible, and with a sense of resolution on the horizon.
keep writing,
mine is up HERE
WOW..you are very talented.
great 55!
Mine is here
Have a great weekend!
hugs
shakira
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