Thursday, April 29, 2010

55-Hallucinations

Strings of images intertwine. Before I can touch them, they fade into the blankness leaving me amidst plays of black and white. I clutch my lungs to narrow the holes and let oxygen in. Tears crystallize on the ground. Between the air and the air again, I let go of my eyes to see you.

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31 comments:

THE BEATY said...

Nice maha. Good 55. check out my magpie tale

Brian Miller said...

realy fascinating..between the air...quite the mystical iece you have woven....nice 55.

Oddyoddyo13 said...

Right after the first line, I thought, "Blurring together until they became one, mixed up scene, replaying over and over, driving me insane...."

But I liked your version so much better. Beautiful Maha.

Magpie said...

This is a beautiful 55, Maha. You do such surreal things with words..."I let go of my eyes to see you."

Sam Liu said...

I love your writing style, I loose myself in your words. This was marvellous, Maha.

Ally said...

So visually rich and beautiful. Awesome! x

Gerry Boyd said...

Nice.

sheri... said...

beautiful 55! i catch myself wondering who you are...a cross between shakespeare, an english lit major, and a damsel in distress! no matter, i'll be back to take another look, to be mesmerized by your skillful words...

Dulce said...

Just AMAZING... I love your writing... I think I've told you afew many times... But it is just that I do really love it!

Hugs
Dulce

Sarah said...

a little piece of mystery that's full of intrique.

Titanium said...

"Between the air and the air..."

There is so very much space, there.
Well done, Maha. This is good!

5thsister said...

wow. and your 14? unbelievable skill for one as young as yourself. very, very nice.

dustus said...

The imagery and flow are hypnotic. Thanks

g-man said...

Maha...
What a prodigy..What a Treasure you are.
Beautiful 55 My Friend.
Thank you for sharing your gift with us all.
Thanks also for visiting, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

Peter Stone said...

Letting go of your eyes to see the person - there is so much to see that our eyes cannot see. For we need to see not a person's outwards appearance but what is inside them.

My 55 is Perceptions Colored

Sh@KiR@ CK said...

Very imaginary and wonderful 55!
Excellent.
Mine is here
I have three 55 to offer.
Hope you like them.
Have you a blessed weekend!
hugs
shakira

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järnebrand said...

I love sharing hallucinations with you... Surreal. You are amazing.
Hugs/ Jo.

John's comments said...

Oops wrong link posted. Surreal! Gone for a poem this week based on the Etheree form created about twenty years ago by an Arkansas poet named Etheree Taylor Armstrong It normally consists of ten lines of unmetered and unrhymed verse, the first line having one syllable, each succeeding line adding a syllable. I added an extra row for the word count and the punch line. See what I mean here.

Hootin' Anni said...

Wow....this is amazing!!! VERY impressive Maha.

Mine this week is DOUBLE STANDARD As always, scroll down a bit, below my Friday's Show n Tell.

Have a super weekend fellow 55'r!!

RNSANE said...

It amazes me that such a young woman can write so beautifully. It as though your soul has lived lifetimes. Wonderful 55, deah Maha.

Monkey Man said...

I love the visual of the tears crystalizing on the ground. Thanks for coming by to visit my 55 as well.

Mama Zen said...

That's scary (or, is it just me?)! Well done!

Alice Audrey said...

So much longing. Great 55.

naramalone.com said...

Lovely. I really love that last line.

PattiKen said...

I like this a lot! It makes me think of awakening from a nightmare.

Prayer Girl said...

Thanks for visiting and commenting on my blog.

Your 55 is intriguing. Really good job. Thank you.

PG

Felicitas said...

FANTASTIC! I'd never of hallucinations quite this way before. Such an interesting and imaginative description.

Leslie said...

Nice 55 Maha- like the images that are
whirling around in space

mine is up at
moondustwriter.com

Me said...

This is stunning, you have a very powerful way with words.

Thank you so much for your comments on my 55 as well.
-C

KB said...

Beautifully written again.