Friday, April 9, 2010

55-Raped




I let my heart beat with the whishing leaves. The grass caressing my naked body and it’s somewhat comforting. I open my eyes and everything is red. I try to scream but the broken teeth suffocate me. A face in the moon appears. You carry me in your arms, and I close my eyes again.


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28 comments:

bard said...

Wow.

John's comments said...

Powerful poem and image. My 55 is here

Jana said...

• Very moving and drenched in pain…

Brian Miller said...

dang.
that was like buckshot to my stomach this morning. sometimes you just blow me away. great 55.

mine is up!

Hootin' Anni said...

Wow....
Most powerful.
Sad.

Here is my Flash 55 for the week. [scroll down below my Show n Tell feature]

Have a wonderful Friday.

sarahjayne smythe said...

Wow. That was amazing. Perfect picture for a perfect piece.

Felicitas said...

Wow! You are a seriously talented young lady! This is a powerful 55.

Magpie said...

What to say...very intense...very well done.

Yvonne Osborne said...

Poignant and beautiful. "Heart beating with the whishing leaves."
Thanks for showing us the depth of what can be rendered with 55 words.

JenniAsh said...

What I want to say is pretty much the same as everyone else... this is beautiful.
x

g-man said...

Very Powerful..
Very poignant..
Brilliant!
Excellent 55 Maha.
One of today's best without a doubt!
Thanks for visiting, thanks for playing, and have a Wonderful Week-End...G

PattiKen said...

Oh, that's so horrifying. My heart beats with hers. Very powerful.c

Dianne said...

Powerful, a good piece for a woman's rights publication. Good to say more with less.
Peace,
Dianne

Akelamalu said...

A very powerful 55 but I truly hope you didn't write this from experience m'dear?

Maha said...

Oh, thanks God, no. I just thought that using the first person narrator fit this piece more.

Vodka Logic said...

ah to be rescued.. I wish.. thanks


my 55 is up

Buzzard said...

Beautifully presented, however I found this subject hard to comment on.

Me said...

Wow...this is a big one. Very heavy stuff. Powerful. Well done on your 55...

And much appreciated, your comments on my own...

Nahla said...

amazing <3

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dianne said...

Very powerful and frightening dear Maha, I do hope you were being rescued at the end? xoxo ♥

Oddyoddyo13 said...

Whoa. That was really haunting Maha. Gorgeous.

Expression of the mind said...

I believe sorely in the beauty of your imagination. How you can widely shut your eyes to evoke the imagery then inhale deeply and start putting down the words carefully is great.


This is a sincere and hearty wish, a wish for you to be the greatest of all, to achieve your dreams and to realize success in the most beautiful ways of all.

Maha, reading your posts has always been a true boon, and a very gratifying pleasure :)

Cynthia said...

Very poignant and powerfu.
Your poem has taken my breath
away, the pain and vulnerability.

THE BEATY said...

like brain said like a punch to the gut. On a happier note whens your magpie tale going up

jingleyanqiu said...

http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/04/09/55-her-name-is-kate-pg-13/

awesome 55.
stay cool!

Eva said...

That created a very intense feeling. One I can't describe but have felt at one point in my life.

Craftsman of light said...

Amazing....You pursue so closely with such vivacity that i can feel my skin peeled off.

You have a fine understanding of the emotional subtilities...as you always reveal through your writing the capacity to bring into light all these finer aspects.

A lots of sparks thrown as you swing your hammer to forge your lines and their curves until they concord with what is inside.

Keep it up..keep me amazed!!
thankyou once again Maha!

Col.