Standing
Nowhere
Melodies
Beautiful Wails
But no one will know
No one will hear
Words
Lost in the stream
Happily
The air
Shall carry them
Far Faraway
But they don’t look
They just see
A mermaid’s screams
Drowned by the sea
Let her die there alone
With no one to care
No one to know
16 comments:
ack. a mermaids screams...heartbreaking and cold...and no one to know. excellent 55.
mine is up!
Wonderfully done. You managed to tug on my emotions in just 55 words.
No one hears, no one looks, no one cares or knows. Very bleak 55, stirs the emotions.
My 55 is School Lunch
i want to launch my boat into the bleak sea...
and offer my aid to that aquatic creature...whose very soul cries in pain...!
How tragic, but beautifully written.
So unfair! Where are the other mermaids?
Great 55. Mine is here.
Welcome to my blog. I appreciated your visit and your comment.
Kind of a sad 55 here, but very well written. I like it.
PG
I don't like the sounds of a mermaid dying alone without anyone caring.
a lonely, sombering scream that is...wonderful 55
Maha...
Thanks for fixing the post because....
THIS IS FANTASTIC!!!!!
WOW girl!
Excellent 55 My Dear.
This poem just cries a mournful lament..
Please play again next Friday...Galen
Beautiful. If a mermaid were to be described, this is the best way.
Wow! What an intensely sad 55. So much evoked in so few words! Thanks for visiting mine!
a beauty of a melancholy lryical poem. love!
Excellent 55ve Maha! Very thought provoking, visual and sensitive!
How sad... And cold... My emotions flowing after reading this. Vivid images. You got that much said using only 55 words. Well done!
Thank you for commenting on mine.
Peace and love/ Jo.
Poignant.. there’s pain in these lines!
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